Friday, 23 January 2009

An exercise in inspiration

My enjoyment from writing, and therefore my primary focus, is to take an isolated incident and describe it in such a way that it takes shape before the very eyes of the reader; so that they can see the events unfolding as though in a movie clip, and picture the characters I describe, as if flicking through a photo album. I came across this writing prompt via a post of Debbie's and have enjoyed the challenge of turning this concept on its head, by unfolding the unwritten text of a photograph.

She sits on the pavement, newspapers a defensive arc against the cold of humanity. Nobody notices her. Even as they drop a coin and snatch a paper, hurrying by to meet self-imposed deadlines, nobody notices her. In the rain they run past her, kicking up sleet in her face. In the blinding heat of the sun she sits, still as a lizard, as children’s laughter echoes through the streets. She has worked the fields till her feet bled from exhaustion; she has borne the children who will shape the future; she has been a daughter, a sister, a friend, a mother; but nobody notices her. She is old now, and one day soon the winds of time will sweep away yesterday’s papers without her. And nobody will notice.

7 comments:

  1. Oh my word. This is fabulous. Did you go to Kathryn's and post a comment that you had done this? Please do that if you haven't. It is actually a contest and I am thinking you are going to win!

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  2. This is a very emotive and sensitive piece of writing.

    It reminded me of an unknown street poet called Tony Gill who lived most his life sleeping rough in Dublin. Here are two quotes I think you'll appreciate and which your piece prompted me to dig out and read again:

    "They pass by in their hundreds, not knowing that the pavement is our pillow, and the stars are our only warmth."

    "Today I spoke to no one, and no one spoke to me. Am I dead?"

    You've echoed his experience and feelings exactly.

    PS. I've just seen Debbie's comment - she's right. Go do something more with this and let us know how you get on.

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  3. Thank you for stopping by my blog - so glad you did - and now I'm following you!


    I'd told everyone I wouldn't comment on the pieces for the book-give-a-way -at least not until it's all over, since that wouldn't be right, but I can say thank you *smiling*

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  4. Debbie - thanks for pointing me towards this great challenge!

    Caren - what beautiful quotes; I will have to read more from Tony Gill. It's great to be introduced to writers I haven't come across before.

    Kathryn - I'm honoured to have you as a follower :)

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  5. Beautiful prose, as always, MT (this is what I have decided to call you from now on, because I'm lazy).

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  6. Not lazy, Tasha, but succinct!

    Tara calls me MTJAM, which I like because it's 'empty jam' when read aloud, which makes me chuckle :)

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  7. MTJAM is good. I can picture R's wooden ELC jam jar with the lid missing (the lid regularly goes missing for weeks on end). I may borrow it. Or, then again, I may forget and just use MT.

    (Word verification is fistrat - now that's a weird image.)

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